Writing IELTS?

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I think the questions like this:

"What do you think about open information to all people, in context of academician, businesses, and researcher? Or not all of information can widely share?"

My writing answer:

One of the popular food chain restaurants, KFC, has a slogan for their product “Making with 11 secret recipes”. I think with the secret recipes, we can taste a very delicious food, especially for their original type. So, regarding the case about open access to all people or not all of information can widely share, in my opinion, I couldn’t agree for open information access to all people, we shouldn’t open all of information, mainly for the secrets.

The secrets information become our strengths in all aspects. One of the famous theories called “Johari Window Model”, explained one window as our hidden part, where you know the information but not known by others. In soccer, we always thinking the “black horses”, when we know the underdog team can won the competition. I think that conditions can happens when we know the parts that’s other not known. So, I think when we can kept our secret information, we can win the competition.

Although with the open information we can get the significances improvement over the time, but we should consider the benefits to ourself when we share the information. So, the copyright and intellectual property right registration become the important things. When we registered our product with the copyright or intellectual property right, we can get the monetary benefit.

In summary, there is an added value for us when we don’t share too much information in public. But, when we share the information, we should register our product with the copyright or intellectual property right. I think in the future, we’ll seen much information in public with the copyright or intellectual property right.

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